Nov 8, 2007 14:53
16 yrs ago
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Problems with punctuation
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I think that in the following sentence a comma should be put either before or after 'service', I do not know where exactly. Does it make more sense to put it before or after 'service'? What do you think?
Sentence:
“As many as 20 makers of 802.11 chips are rushing devices to market as new classes of systems makers and service companies pursue fresh opportunities delivering industrial-strength wireless LANs for businesses and a rising army of public-access ‘hot spots’.”
Thanks in advence.
Sentence:
“As many as 20 makers of 802.11 chips are rushing devices to market as new classes of systems makers and service companies pursue fresh opportunities delivering industrial-strength wireless LANs for businesses and a rising army of public-access ‘hot spots’.”
Thanks in advence.
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Alexander Demyanov
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Alexander Demyanov
Software Engineering background
Native in: Russian 
Works in: English, Russian, Russian to English, and 1 more.
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I see a couple other problem here:
(1) It should be "system makers";
(2) I'm not sure it's appropriate to call a multitude of "hot spots" "an army".
As for punctuation, I'd stick a comma before "as"
(1) It should be "system makers";
(2) I'm not sure it's appropriate to call a multitude of "hot spots" "an army".
As for punctuation, I'd stick a comma before "as"
Peer comment(s):
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charlie47
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Thanks, Charlie!
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Deborah Workman
: Yes, to all, though I wouldn't put a comma before "as". Re: the army, one could have an army of hot-spot service providers.
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Thanks, Deborah! I would. Otherwise it could be confused for "devices as new classes". Army of providers, yes; army hot-spots, no, in my opinion.
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Richard Benham
: Comma after "as" is strictly optional. I agree on "system makers", although it's ""systems programmers". A comma either before or after "sevice" would make nonsense of the whole sentence. "Army" is wrong and "rising" inappropriate. Rising tide? Welter?
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Thanks, Richard! Sure, it's optional. I say "I'd stick" and I would, if only to avoid confusion w/"devices as new classes". Yes, "systems programmers". I used to be one, as well as a "systems designer" at one point.
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Elena Aleksandrova
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Thanks, Elena!
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